One more post until after the wedding... but I will be back after the wedding! ;)
Are you doing school yet? If so, how has it been going? *tries not to sound smug* I hope it's been going well. :)
Here's the next part of the adventure down by the ocean, inspired by my own trip down there just this last May! Hope you're enjoying! If you missed a part, you can find it under the "Stories in Progress" page. Otherwise, read on and enjoy!
Chapter Four:
The first thing Shawn was aware of in
the morning was his brother kicking him violently in the shin and exclaiming in
a groggy voice, “Quit snoring already! You’re being so loud!” It crossed
his mind that he couldn’t have possibly been being louder than Ray’s talking.
With a resigned sigh, he bore the kicks and tried in vain to go back to sleep.
On his side, his eyes determinedly
shut, Shawn cleared his mind in order to drift off. Instead, his ears began
picking up sounds. Ray’s even breathing told him that his brother had
successfully made it back into dream-land, and the clock on the wall ticked
louder than he would have liked. Far away, from down the staircase, he could
hear his dad already up and it sounded like he was making coffee. Good, Shawn
thought tiredly, I’ll need a cup of that to keep me awake today.
Finally, giving up on going back to sleep, he
opened his eyes and squinted at the red numerals on the room’s alarm clock.
6:35 am, it read accurately. Shawn rolled from the queen-sized bed he shared
with his brother and opened the door as quietly as possible. He didn’t dare to
look in the mirror, knowing his dark hair was probably sticking in all
directions of a compass and not wanting to accept the reality yet. Already he
was painfully aware of his bed-rumpled appearance, but rested in the assurance
that he would be put together by breakfast since he had been forced awake
before 7:00. He padded down the stairs in his stocking-feet and arrived in the
living room.
His dad, caught in his morning
devotions, looked up from his Bible in surprise. “Shawn? What are you doing
up?”
Shawn gave a long-suffering sigh before
plopping down on the other side of the couch and curling into a ball.
“Apparently I was snoring.”
A knowing look crossed his dad’s face,
and it was obvious he was trying very hard not to smile. “I’m sorry about
that.”
“Yeah, me too,” Shawn answered
truthfully. “When I couldn’t get back to sleep, I heard you working on coffee
down here and thought I would snag a cup while it was fresh and then take an
early shower to finish waking me up.”
“It’s dripping through right now,” his
dad answered. “It should be done in a couple minutes.”
Shawn ran a hand through his crazy hair
and smiled wanly. “Good, ‘cause I’m going to need some.”
His dad let out a chuckle, which Shawn
couldn’t help but join. After a short silence, his dad finished the chapter he
was reading and put aside his Bible to face his oldest son.
“Can you tell me what happened
yesterday?” he asked suddenly, catching Shawn off guard.
His son gave him a startled look that
had some puzzlement in it. “Didn’t Nicole tell you about it?”
His dad shrugged. “Sort of. She talked
to your mom and I got the story from her. I’d like to hear it from an
eye-witness.”
Shawn frowned, his anger and confusion
of the previous day still somewhat affecting his attitude. “Well, as you know
we went to the beach to take a walk, but Nicole wanted to draw a picture of the
ocean so we took a break and sat on the sand. Ray went to ‘get his feet wet’ as
he put it, but I stayed with Nicole on the sand and started to read more of
that book I’m in middle of.
“Next thing I know, Ray comes running
back, shoves a huge crab in our faces and Nicole screams and drops her
sketchbook. The drawings go everywhere and we start picking them up after Ray
puts the crab back in the water. A dude comes by and picks up one of the
drawings to look at it, Nicole asked for it, and he gave it to her with a
cheesy smile.” Shawn’s frown darkened and he paused.
“Go on,” his dad encouraged. “Then what
happened?”
“He said he liked the picture and that
he thought she was accomplished. Nicole admitted that she wasn’t really, and he
disagreed, adding this time that not only was she accomplished…” Shawn gritted
his teeth, “…but pretty.”
His dad raised his eyebrows. “And
then?” he pressed.
Shawn’s glower had become almost
thunderous. “Ray and I were stunned. We had no idea what we should say to him
that would be at all proper, and I was just about ready to punch his smug face.”
Shawn gave his dad an appealing look. “I
couldn’t exactly do that, though, right? I mean, I’m a Christian for
crying out loud! I’m supposed to treat everyone in love and stuff. But he was
pushing it a bit. He left pretty quickly I can tell you that much.”
“Then?”
“Nicole,” Shawn’s frown dissipated
somewhat and a glimmer of respect came into his eyes, “played a horrendous joke
on Ray and me to get back at us for the crab incident…though I played no part
in it whatsoever.”
His dad chuckled. “I do remember that
part.”
Shawn grinned. “She got us good with
her ridiculous acting. She pretended to actually think the dude was cute or
something, which nearly caused me to explode. But she admitted her joke just in
time and we continued our walk after a good laugh at my and Ray’s expense.”
Shawn concluded his story with a shrug. “That’s about all.”
The coffee beeped, and his dad got up
to make himself and his wife their cups. Shawn followed him into the kitchen
and made himself up a cup. When they finally got back to the living room, Shawn
had a troubled look on his face. His dad noticed and after they sat back on the
couch, asked him what was wrong.
“I just want to know…what could I have
done to help Nicole out?” he asked. “As
we grow up, there’s probably going to be times when guys approach Nicole when
you and Mom aren’t there, but we boys are. What should we do?”
His dad took a sip of the steaming
liquid before answering slowly. “First, try not to judge them right away.”
Shawn gave him a puzzled look, so he hurried to explain, “I think you tend to
jump to conclusions about people. Ray is better at not doing that, but he
probably will have the same problem when it comes to guys interested in his
sister. We’ve raised you both to feel protective about her, and for good
reasons. We want her to feel safe, and brothers are natural protectors.
Granted, some more than others, but I think you and Ray fall under the ‘some
more’ category.”
Shawn met his dad’s eyes and was
surprised by the warmth he found there. There was no doubt that his dad loved
him and his siblings. A lot. Had he ever doubted? Well, if he had, he shouldn’t
have.
“Last afternoon was a surprise, and it
caught you and your brother off guard.”
“I’ll say it did!” Shawn exclaimed
emphatically. “I mean, what could we say? ‘No, she’s not talented and
pretty’? That would have been a lie! Besides which, we would have called
Nicole’s wrath down upon us later…which would not have been a pretty
sight.”
His dad chuckled. “True. Let me get
back to what I was saying. You need to first not jump to any conclusions about
them. Very few people do relationships the way we do. So you can’t judge them
by our standards. Secondly, make sure the young man involved is a Christian,
and then send him my direction if he seems honestly interested in a serious
relationship. Otherwise, just treat him like you would any other friend. It’s
not a sin for him to compliment someone. God may want you and your siblings to
reach out to this young man, and this was His way of showing you.”
Shawn crinkled his nose. “If God is, He
sure picked a strange way.”
“God sometimes picks strange ways,” his
dad replied wisely, “and you have to be ready.”
“I will,” Shawn answered uncertainly,
“but—”
A pattering of footsteps came from
above them, and soon a pair of socked feet and pajama pants appeared to
announce the entrance of Nicole. She walked over to her dad, gave him a quick
hug and questioning look.
“The coffee is only about twenty
minutes old,” he assured her.
A relieved expression replaced the
questioning one, and she walked into the kitchen to get herself a cup. “I was
afraid it might be stale,” she explained upon re-entry, her hands clasped
around the warmth of her mug.
“Nope,” Shawn said, glancing down at
his almost full cup. “I’ve barely started drinking mine. We were talking about
yesterday.”
Nicole’s face heated at the thought,
and she squirmed a little in her chair. “Yeah…well, let’s just hope it doesn’t
happen again.”
Her brother grinned. “Oh, don’t worry,
Dad was giving me tips on how to act if it did happen again.”
“Really?” Nicole raised an eyebrow.
“Well, as long as it doesn’t involve a giant crab being thrust into my face
when I’m not expecting it, I’m good.”
“What’s this about a giant crab?” Ray asked
as he sat Indian-style on the floor with his legs folded and his own mug of
steaming coffee balanced on a knee.
“Oh hi!” Shawn smirked. “We were just
talking about you!”
Ray cocked an eyebrow. “I’m a
giant crab?” he asked in disbelief.
Shawn and Nicole burst out laughing,
were joined by their dad, and eventually even Ray joined, still not sure what
was so funny, but finding their merriment contagious.
“No, we were discussing the things that
happened yesterday,” Shawn finally exclaimed after their laughter had died
down.
A frown wrinkled Ray’s forehead. “I’m
really bummed that had to happen,” he said finally.
Nicole smiled. “Hey, I said I forgave
you, right?” Her brother nodded. “So, it’s fine. It’s not like my sketches got
ruined or anything.”
Their mom came out of her room and
asked Nicole to start helping her get breakfast together. It wasn’t long before
they had finished eating and cleaning up after it since the meal wasn’t super
fancy.
“What are we planning on doing today?”
Nicole asked finally, when the family was sitting down around the living room
in order to decide that very thing.
Her dad looked thoughtful. “Well, I was
thinking maybe we could do some tourist stuff and shopping this morning and eat
lunch out.” He looked over at his wife sitting next to him.
She smiled. “That sounds great honey!
When do the shops usually get open?”
Shawn raised a hand. “I saw most of the
ones we passed on the way through town said 10:00 am or 11:00 am,” he informed
them.
Ray’s mouth dropped open. “You were
paying attention?” he asked. “I thought you were reading your book!”
Shawn sat straighter. “I always pay
attention!” he declared indignantly. “Just because I’m reading doesn’t mean I
don’t see and hear the things going on around me!”
“Boys,” their mom warned gently, “the
important thing is that Shawn knows what times the shops open so we can plan
our day.”
Nicole glanced at her wristwatch. “So,
we should head out in about half an hour?” she asked.
Their dad nodded. “We’ll head out
whenever we’re all showered and ready.” He gave a knowing look in Shawn’s
direction. “But we’ll try not to take too long, right?”
Shawn nodded obligingly. He’d do his
best to not keep the family waiting. “I’ll start getting ready next,” he promised.
I'll admit. I laughed out loud when Ray said, "I'm a giant crab?". XD
ReplyDeleteLoving this story! Can't wait for the next part!
So this is based on your own beach trip? Was the an incident with a giant crab on your trip? ;)
I love that part. :P It made me laugh too. Totally something a brother of mine might say. ;)
DeleteYes, but most of it is made up. Um...sort of. My younger two brothers were obsessed with finding dozens of crabs and put them all into a cup. I pretended to be scared stiff of them and they thought it was HILARIOUS. So that particular scene was inspired. ;)
Haha! That's terrible. XD
DeleteI really liked when Ray asked if he was a giant crab too! :D
ReplyDeleteGreat job on the story Rebekah! :)
Thank you! I'm so glad y'all are enjoying it so much! :)
DeleteLOVE THE NEW BLOG BACKGROUND!!!
ReplyDeleteAnd I really enjoyed this part. :) I like the father/son talk. :) Do you have any idea how long this story will be?
Oh, and I have to say I really like Nicole! I think she's my favorite girl character you've written so far. :)
THANKS!!! I DO TOO!!! :)
DeleteYay! So glad you're enjoying my story. ^_^ I'm hoping for it to be about 30,000 words long...but we'll see. I'm a little swamped with editing right now.
She's pretty awesome, huh? If I do say so myself. ;)
Don't get me wrong, I like the father-son and mother-daughter talks, but I do feel it's stagnant. I think you could easily loose a reader here (assuming they hadn't read your other books, then they'd know something was coming). Maybe you could take out some of the talk and show me how they act their parents advice out later. Just my thought. . .
ReplyDeleteOther than that, I'm really liking your stabs of humor.
Good to know. I'll keep that in mind! I'm glad you're enjoying my story! :)
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